Kirtinagar – The City of Deeds
Ruh was watching Prajuktipur’s shadow on
completely deserted, gradually waning Kirtinagar, sprawling over thousand
hectares, through Eastern panes of her sixtieth-floor office.
Ruh’s mother Seema commented from behind,
“Gloating?”
Ruh replied reluctantly, “Measuring,
scheming…. the endeavor, the expenditure required to remove Rathin Gupto’s mess
on the marsh.”
Frowning Seema snapped, “Do you care
about my baba’s blood, sweat, money dissolved in the marsh, keeping Kirtinagar
intact?”
Ruh bantered, “In control.”
She added then, "I’ve checked the
land records. Guptos used to own the marsh. Then the government put limit on
individual landholding. Rathin’s father lost the marsh.”
Seema screamed, “Rathin? Not dadan? Disrespecting
your grandfather!”
Ruh laughed out loud, “Clever dadan!
If I call you Seema, I’ll end up with Ma….”
Seema reminded Ruh, “This Pajuktipur office,
trendy outfits, cars, your snuffs, gadgets – my shrewd baba earned all.
The control you’re contorting about… he bought that, bribing politicians… freed
the marsh from squatters, from their shacks made of rags and cane on raised bamboo
platforms, by buying their non-salable ownership, bestowed to them by the
government, for their rehabilitations...”
Ruh interrupted, “Dadan harvested
return on investment. The Democratic Government, run by politicians on his payroll,
paid him for filling up the marsh and building Kirtinagar thereof.”
She asserted then, “Dadan knew… every
construction at Kirtinagar was destined to be corroded by moisture, creeping up
through pores of landfill, by water clogging…”
Seema justified, “Drag of developing
Kirtinagar inflicted baba with hypertension, culminated into cerebral
thrombosis.”
Ruh slandered, “Then his dutiful
daughter left fashionable student politics and joined nasty family business.”
Seema reminisced, “I’s twenty-one then. It
was fun being tagalong to Mrinal, charismatic campus leader of violent student
politics…”
Ruh taunted, “Tagalong? You’re lovers.
Though Deepak’s your fiancé then.”
Seema scowled, “Deepak? You used to call
him baba….”
Ruh sneered, “Yay, the looser tried hard
to be my father.”
Seema recalled, “I approached Kirtinagar
residents for converting their damp, friable small family homes to high rises.
Then Prajuktipur had just began to grow, unable to accommodate all its workers
belonging to several echelons of pay. High demand for low cost housing in
vicinity was just about to pop.”
She continued, “Resources were scant
then. Baba’s unable to walk, talk or eat. Most residents of Kirtinagar
willingly converted their property, accepting compensations, in cash or flats
or a combination of both. Deepak’s the lender. The wealthier Kirtinagar denizens
were resistant. Mrinal’s ingenious maneuvers….”
Ruh slandered, “Ingenious maneuvers?
You’re glorifying how Mrinal burned a few of them alive.”
She
went on, “Your ever-delayed repayments made Deepak look into your books. Thus,
he realized how Mrinal was sucking your business, how return on investment was
just break even, though sales figures were humongous continuously for ten years.”
Seema mentioned scornfully, digressing
intentionally, “On your fifth birthday, Deepak wished for another child, to
help you with the business.”
Ruh laughed and replied, “You spilled
the beans…..”
Seema, too, laughed and added, “The look
on his face…. I still remember. He took quite a while to assimilate, then
surmised, ‘Oh! It’s always Mrinal.’ I abruptly rectified though, ‘Ruh’s from
Ashis, the interior decorator, hired for our Prajuktipur office.”
Ruh inferred, “Thus Deepak lived lost,
till he succumbed to the road rage”.
Then, she returned to Seema’s initial
question, “Not gloating, though nobody’s out there with the leverage of knowing
my criminal secret…... of stealing a fatal microbial strain from the college
lab, then mixing it to Kirtinagar’s water supply lines, all by myself, leaving
no loose end, hence, no risk of being blackmailed, unlike your messy arrangements
involving Mrinal.”
Few months ago, Seema alerted Ruh, “Business’
about to collapse, unless we match our stride to catch up with current booming
trend in Prajuktipur. High rise buildings comprising dingy apartments, stingy
shops, congesting Kirtinagar, like litter, must give way to planned development
of spacious well-lit condos, town houses, bungalows, shopping plazas with huge parking
spaces, wide drivable roads, greenery, underground sewerage and drainage…. I can’t
compensate all the residents of Kirtinagar. Thirty thousand people lives in its
each square kilometer, over three hundred thousand people in total, incurring a
hundred billion rupees in compensation.”
Ruh sarcastically added then, “Ask
Mrinal to drop a bomb on Kirtinagar, though he’ll bleed the business white for the
job, wrenching you for never marrying him.”
A week after this conversation, in wee
hours of a weekday, Ruh went live on social media, sharing her stray dog feeding
endeavor amidst the crew of Kirtinagar Municipality, at one of Kirtinagar’s water
supply maintenance sites. Instantly, she earned compassion of the crew. Keeping
the crew busy in front and rear of her camera, Ruh, stealthily, added the
microbe colony to the city water supply. In a few weeks, some unknown infection
wiped out population of three blocks of Kirtinagar.
Ruh’s video of dog feeding went viral. Banking
upon hugely compassionate public mood, she buzzed continuously against nexus of
corrupt politicos and construction farms, holding them responsible for fatal
infection at Kirtinagar.
In tandem, the mainstream media
sensation machinery narrative held Ruh a hero, a scion revolting against her own
people. Also, their reportage terrorized Kirtinagar residents of imminent death.
Within weeks, Kirtinagar dwellers vacated the city, voluntarily.
Ruh’s explanation about her modus
operandi silenced Seema. Ruh asserted the forward plan, “You must soon announce
my engagement to Prama.”
Seema reacted, “The cement baron Dutta’s
daughter!”
Ruh ignored, “It must be ostentatious.
It’ll bring you to the fold of sympathizers of marginalized persons. It’ll
steer clear all bad press about redevelopment of Kirtinagar”
Seema fumbled, “Even last night your orgasmic
moans were from Soham! What’s about him?”
Ruh snapped, “I’ll keep him in the closet.
Until open relationship for bisexuals or promiscuity in general becomes
fashionably adorable, or sexual straightness starts to be ostracized….”
She digressed abruptly though, “Wanna
get rid of Mrinal?”
After three months, Mrinal succumbed to
heart attack, without prior heart complaint. Ruh posted a photo of Mrinal on
social media explaining how he inspired Ruh.
Wow. Devious, nasty and all too successful. A family without a conscience. What if anything, will bring Karma to their doorstep...?
ReplyDeleteThanks for the comment.
DeleteKarma is knocking and the family is getting away through a backdoor, until now. Who knows what's next...
Wow - such convoluted and nasty plans! Like Elephant's Child I wonder about karma....
ReplyDeleteKarma is under lockdown. I am, too, waiting for Karma's return to good old World of deeds.
DeleteHi,
ReplyDeleteThe sad part is that the theme of your story has a piece of reality in it especially with what is going on today. I read it and felt sorry for the underprivileged.
As for the style you used, it was magnificent. I actually could feel myself in India. See the crowded streets and hear the honks of cars and buggies or bikes. The atmosphere was excellently set.
Outstanding job.
Shalom aleichem
Pat Garcia
Thank you Pat for sharing.
DeleteI labored to give my readers the feel of circumstances. Thus, your comment is encouraging for it seems i could take baby steps to my goal.
Devious to the core.
ReplyDeleteThank you.
DeleteYes they're.
A descriptive, highly modern tale that contrasts how the viewpoints of the young and old differ. In addition to showing what drives Ruh to such questionable actions. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the insight.
DeleteYou did express the essence of the culture with your writing style. And you captured one of the darker aspects of human beings, the art of deception. That transcends culture along with some other particularly unsavory qualities.
ReplyDeleteThank you . Your comment is truly encouraging.
DeleteOh, this Ruh is totally evil, and not ashamed of her wickedness. Very powerful.
ReplyDeleteThank you Olga for the comment. Ruh is devious.
DeleteThis hit too close to home, with the latest scandalous invention from the power behind our Tory-throne. Well written, and rbings the characters to life.
ReplyDeleteWow Jemima, you've opened my eyes. I tried to write something very Indian. Your comment has made the matter global . :)))
DeleteWow. Hints of devious deception.
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There are kernels of truth in there. I put nothing past big Pharma or businesses. Well written and evoked anger. Dixie Jarchow
ReplyDeleteThank you Dixie.
DeleteI shudder to think how many times through history such shady deeds have been done so the wealthy or powerful can get their way. This family is rotten and scheming. This tale is more true to life than I wish it were. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThank you Laura for all encouraging words. Initially I planned a novel with three generations of notoriety with peek on one previous and one subsequent generations, with a snap of Karma at the climax. Before getting into penning the whole idea into a novel I got an opportunity to test run in the current challenge.
DeleteWow, I read and see the same in the capital where the destruction of the entire country is occurring. So much truth in the deviousness of power! Well done!
ReplyDeleteThank you Yolanda for insightful comments. All I could elucidate is power. The struggle for wealth, actualization and enjoyment remained subdued.
DeleteCold-blooded and calculating indeed. A chilling read. Well done!
ReplyDelete~Cie from Naughty Netherworld Press~
Thank you Cie.
DeleteOh wow! This was splendidly spun, capitalism at its worst. And what perfect setting. Well done! I loved it.
ReplyDeleteThank you for encouraging words. I don't know about capitalism or any ism. I can only see biological interactions interspecies and intraspecies. Mostly, that amuses me, this time it turned out nether way.
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ReplyDeleteWhoa, that seems pure evil, almost more evil than is possible for any one person/family to be.
ReplyDeleteHa ha.. Thanks for the comment.
DeleteRuthlessness comes to my mind in reading this. There's an awful lot to take in.
ReplyDeleteTruly awful. Thanks Sally for the words.
DeleteThanks for this Sanhita. Very well written dialogue, compelling. You should write plays, adding more body language to dialogue maybe. I understand you dropping the punctuation for effect ... you can probably get away with it in poetry, sometimes, however, in prose, no magazine would be willing to publish your story as it stands. Don’t like rules, myself, intent on breaking them all the time .... Nice twist in the plot. Happy WEP week.
ReplyDeleteThank you Susan for the input.
DeleteI have other stories, in this blog, from total omnipotent POV , mix of dialogues and omnipotent POV, first person POV and more. I use dialogues and narrations to fit in the given constraints of word limit, theme, opening line et cetera. I try to fit my stories under given constraints as long as the process of storytelling amuses me. I would not relinquish my creative liberty to comply with a few parochial notions of magazine editors.
The world is getting freer everyday as technologies are liberating individuals more and more. I have my blog. I am not anxious for being published in any magazine. Also, writing is not my vocation, but a hobby. I am happy to die poor, unheard unrecognized unappreciated as a failure. I would never rush to achieve a success defined by others.
These stories are dark to match the given theme. My world is full of light. Amidst countless conspiracies, my trivial individual has so far survived protecting her freedom of expression. I am confident that till biological death I need not be gung-ho to fit my expressions with contemporary fashionably adorable concepts prevailing in society and geographies.
Wow! What a wonderfully wicked character. I love it! If, as you mentioned in another comment, this is a test run for a novel, I think you have at least two excellent characters and a great plot to build on.
ReplyDeleteThank you Donna. To pursue the novel i have to find some space in my schedule. Let us hope for the best.
DeleteA tale that is all too true to life these days. You expressed the essence of Indian culture with your descriptions. And you captured in your tale the art of deception. Oh that evil Ruh. Devious to the core.
ReplyDeleteThank you Denise for all encouraging words.
DeleteHowever, as a responsible Indian, I must mention that this is not the Indian culture. Indian culture is far more complex and far more magnanimous to fit in a flash fiction with given word limit. This is global paradigm where deviousness is common and galore. This is a slice of contemporary and evolving India. This is a piece depicting how opportunities are made in every issue globally by people with skill to earn profit for themselves.
Hints are in global immigration scenario after outbreak of COVID-19 pandemic, booming business of Zoom, hike in demand of sanitizers and masks and so on.
Wow. This is dark and powerful. Still processing. Great entry.
ReplyDeleteThank you.
DeleteCool story. I enjoyed it.
ReplyDeleteThank you Jamie.
DeleteHi Sanhita - all I could think of was the Mesopotamian Marshes outside Baghdad that Saddam Hassein drained and the appalling consequences ... so your story ran really true for me - even though I realised it was India you were talking about. Sadly corruption abounds everywhere ...
ReplyDeleteGreat story telling and I really complement you on writing in the English language - it is not easy for so many - but is the language for now that many utilise.
Take care - Hilary
Hello Hilary.
DeleteMarshes are physiographic kidneys. They clean up drainage and absorbs harmful byproducts. Choking them creates lots of problems, physiographic and human.
Physiographic features appearing on discreet geographic locations may create unique or analogous, even similar human interactions. Thus, in a story about India, you view Baghdad, some views England, some views others...
I have nothing more to say about English. Thanks mentioning my comments on English and my english.